My Family
Doyou want to know about my family ? OK !there are four people in my family . This is my father ,he is a doctor.He likesnodoll.this is my mother .Shi is a doctor too.She likes fruit. The girl is my sister .She is a student ,she is sixteen years old .She likes sports. Who is last people ? The people ia me .I am twenty .I like bastball . This is my family,do you like it ?
My Family
Doyou want to know about my family ? OK !there are four people in my family . This is my father ,he is a doctor.He likesnodoll.this is my mother .Shi is a doctor too.She likes fruit. The girl is my sister .She is a student ,she is sixteen years old .She likes sports. Who is last people ? The people ia（is） me .I am twenty .I like bastball . This is my family,do you like it ?
小同学，你的家庭真幸福呀，老师like it。从作文中老师了解了你的family ，其中有你的father 、mother、sister、 me 。而且了解了他们的爱好和在做什么，你交代的很清楚。老师建议你再把人物介绍的更具体些，比如写一下人物的主要外貌特征。这样就更好了。祝你写作进步。谢谢你对老师的信任。期待你投稿中文作文介绍你的家庭，老师将认真为你批改，好吗？
