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My lifestylr

作者: 13854607958       年级: 初中三年级       作文类型: 其 他       发布日期: 2013-08-17 09:09:05

Everyone has his or her lifestyle, different people have varieties of styles, too. As to lifestyle, (From my own perspective)maybe there are two types. One is quiet and shy, the other is outgoing.



Many people like reading books, chatting with friends online, or even staying at home, watching TV the whole day. Those people who prefer not to go out are quiet. I would rather stay at home than take part in the activities sometimes. However, to a certain extent, going out for fun is much more interesting than doing homework. I have many hobbies, such as playing the piano, singing songs and devoting myself to various social activities.Life is colorful, we hope that we can control it freely. In my opinion,most of students now belong to the second type. A man who is famous should be easygoing and modest, though.

My lifestylr

批改教师: 徐老师       时间:2013-08-17 12:36:48

Everyone has his or her lifestyle, different people have varieties of styles, too. As to lifestyle, (From my own perspective)maybe there are two types. One is quiet and shy, the other is outgoing. 【Full text begins with the master, introduces the way of life of the common state, very much oh ~ ~~ 】

Many people like reading books, chatting with friends online, or even staying at home, watching TV the whole day. Those people who prefer not to go out are quiet. I would rather stay at home than take part in the activities sometimes. However, to a certain extent, going out for fun is much more interesting than doing homework. I have many hobbies, such as playing the piano, singing songs and devoting myself to various social activities.Life is colorful, we hope that we can control it freely. In my opinion,most of students now belong to the second type. 【 Should be approached in the introduction of two different types, later will not appear abrupt, you said right?】A man who is famous should be easygoing and modest, though. 【 suggest modify the sentence to express very is not in conformity with the English expression habits oh ~ ~ 】


教师评语:

Classmate hello, your composition language is fluent, content focus on attention to reality, is targeted, if it can be further clear in writing level, further clarify your center, your composition will be the icing on the cake, the better! Wish you study progress and happy life!

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